下水作文 | 2023年5月Z20名校联盟2023届高三第三次联考（读后续写）

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· 2023年5月Z20名校联盟2023届高三

第三次联考 ·

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Part 1

试 题 原 题

· SHI TI YUAN TI ·

第二节 读后续写（满分25分）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

“SAI BABA! Sai Baba! Sai Baba! Hahahaha!”

“Today is Shimla’s big day! We have a celebrity visiting our city! Hahahaha!” Rani’s cheeks burned with embarrassment and tears stung her eyes as she elbowed her way to the exit through the crowd of teasing boys in the packed school bus. It wasn’t the first time she’d been called Sai Baba, after the famous Hindu holy man （印度圣人）she’d seen on TV with his trademark afro（爆炸式卷发）towering over his head.

But this time had to be the worst. Rani jumped off the school bus, angry thoughts hovering inside Rani’s head as she marched home in the drizzling rain. Why did her hair have to curl like a giant cotton candy balloon just when she wanted it to behave? Why, why, why, fumed Rani as she turned the back door key.

“Rani, is that you?”Mama called from the family room. Suddenly Rani’s cousins, Amit and Sumit, came charging toward her. “How many eggs does Rani have in that nest on her head?” screamed Amit. “Let me get that wig（假发）off Rani’s head!”shouted Sumit. Before she could think, Rani had fled out the door and went back up the road she’d walked down minutes before. Halfway up, she slid unseen behind a green curtain of bamboo. Tearing through the wild growth, she made her way down a narrow mud path into a clearing（空地）. She threw her schoolbag on the ground and breathed hard.

“I hate my hair!” she cried. Collapsing on her schoolbag, she bitterly remembered the time she’d spent trying to smooth her hair in vain. Before long, she fell into a fitful sleep.

“RANI! RAA-AANI!”

Rani woke up to Mama’s calls. She sounded anxious. “I’ll never go home,”she promised herself darkly. Mama let Amit and Sumit make fun of me. Papa would never have done that. He would listen to me and stand by my side. The minutes wore on. Alone in her secret hideout, Rani watched the shadow of Mamna get longer and begin to disappear as dusk fell.

注意:

1. 续写词数应为150左右;

2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。

Suddenly, leaves rustling, someone or something was making its way into the clearing._____________________

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The next moment Papa was sitting beside her. ______________________

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Part 2

试题分析

· SHI TI FEN XI ·

●写作分析

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1.主要人物（角色）：

①Rani: “I hate my hair!”

②Mama: Mama let Amit and Sumit make fun of me.

③Papa: Papa would never have done that. He would listen to me and stand by my side.

2.主题：人与自我——如何正确认识自我

Rani因为她的头发，经常被人欺负笑话。有一天终于忍无可忍，被嘲笑后，她逃到一个隐蔽的地方躲避并思考自己的问题。最终，在父亲的帮助下，她对自己有了全新的认识，走出了心理的“困境”。

3.续写情节安排：

●第一段：Suddenly, leaves rustling, someone or something was making its way into the clearing.

①（与开头句衔接）当时的心情：害怕？后悔？......

②但想到之前的经历，准备继续躲藏

③（与下文开头句衔接）在感到非常无助的时候，父亲出现了

●第二段：The next moment Papa was sitting beside her.

①（与开头句衔接）父亲怎样挑起开导的话题？

②与父亲怎样交流

③最终在父亲的帮助下走出了头发的“阴影”

Part 3

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· XIA SHUI ZUO WEN ·

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Suddenly, leaves rustling, someone or something was making its way into the clearing. So frightened was she that her heart beat fast. Fear as well as a bit regret, she kept still, not knowing what would happen next. Indeed, what she experienced in the very day contributed to her determination that she would never go home. However, as the sound of the steps approached, there came a familiar figure. It was Papa, holding an umbrella with anxious expressions. Rani couldn’t wait to rush out of her secret hideout before Papa knew it. She dashed over and hugged him tightly, bursting out crying with great sadness. It seemed to be decades before Rani calmed down. (101 words)

The next moment Papa was sitting beside her. What surprised her most was that no blame came from Papa. Instead, Papa’s warm words melt her “frozen”heart. “I am here for you, Rani!”Papa said as if nothing had happened. “From Mama, I know what occurred to you. I really understand your unique hair, which apparently has brought you so much trouble. But let it go! You’re always a gifted girl in our hearts! It is your good performance and talent that show what you are! Cheer up, my girl! ...”On that gloomy day, nothing was better than such words full of love and understanding that gave her courage to face life with confidence. (108 words)

Part4

参考范文

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